1/ A naked woman, slightly disheveled, clings to the wheel on the heavy metal door of an ornate containment unit to help keep herself upright. She is tastefully covered by her voluminous black hair and copious amounts of steam, like The Birth Of Venus. The unit is boxy, akin to a modern day furnace, with brass tubing and several receptacles on the side. Only one receptacle is currently used, holding what looks to be a half-empty glass jar of orange mud. The woman looks like a frightened animal. She's suffering temporarily from sensory overload.
These are the results of a man desperately trying to re-corporealize the spirit of his dead wife.
1.1/ Silhouette. A man kneeling in front of a grave. He holds a wilting bouquet. Behind him, the sun sets.
Caption: The loss.
1.2/ The same man, wearing goggles, working with metal. About to bring down a hammer. Behind him, blueprints.
Caption: The anger.
1.3/ He flips a switch on a console, lifting his goggles to see. Behind him, the containment unit.
Caption: The drive.
Caption: ...But it wasn't her.
An elegant and concise page, Phil, but it's the layout that really (excuse the pun) brings it to life. You painted a picture with your words, but the actual picture is icing on the cake.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Grant. I had a very specific image of Lisa from Weird Science stepping out of a machine from the live-action Casper movie when I sat down to write. Might not completely stand on it's own without the script, but as the first page of something, I'm pretty happy with it.
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