Panel 1
Exterior,
night, outside a bar. Howard, a man in his thirties, stands outside
on the sidewalk. He watches the commotion in the bar through
one of the windows. The
building is made of aged wood, like it's been standing for the better
part of the last century. The sources of light are what's coming from
the windows and the lights on a faded sign which reads “Minerva's”.
1.
HOWARD (caption): It's been nearly five years. You'd think time would
make it easier to return to a place you stormed out of.
2.
HOWARD (caption): It doesn't.
Panel
2
Interior,
bar. Howard enters the bar. The interior is utter chaos. There are
groups of people milling around, holding beer. People are laughing,
enjoying their time. Behind the bar is a woman about two decades
older than Howard. There are a few empty spots at the bar.
Panel
3
Howard
stands awkwardly in front of the door. Cindy, a gruff looking woman
in her forties, approaches Howard. She is carrying a tray of empty
mugs.
3.
CINDY: Hey, ain't you Minerva's boy? Howie or something?
4.
HOWARD: Uh...Yeah. Howard, actually.
Panel
4
Cindy
walks away from Howard as she shouts over her shoulder at him.
5.
CINDY: Well, Howie, quit blockin' the door. Either grab a stool or a
broom.
Panel
5
Howard
sits down at the bar, a small little smile on his face.
6.
HOWARD (caption): But some parts are easier than others.
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This is great. Nice and understated.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I really like how understated this is, but maybe a way to make this slightly better is to cut out the first two captions and perhaps integrate more of Howard's feelings into Cindy's reaction to him, or other people's reaction? This has a real Jason Aaron / Southern Bastards vibe to it though.
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