1.1: TWO KIDS on bicycles ride down a lonely single street framed by trees on all sides. The road can be a little craggy with potholes and warps in the road, the suggestion here is that it’s abandoned.
1.2: The kid on the left—let’s call him KID 1—KICKS the kid on the right (KID 2) off his bike and nearly off-panel.
1.3: Kid 2 is on the ground, just off the road, holding onto his leg—some BONE is sticking out of his shin. This wouldn’t be XOMBI if there wasn’t some magical healing scene of course.
1. KID 1 [O.P.]: I’m sorry, but I can’t allow you to continue…
1.4: A small inset panel of the BONE in Kid 2’s leg healing up. The bone has gone back into his leg, but there’s still blood coming through his fingertips.
1.5: Kid 1 is pointing a PISTOL at Kid 2. I’m seeing this as a kind of Michael Bay shot: from the perspective of KID 2 on the ground looking up at his friend, pointing the gun at him.
2. KID 1: Son.
1.6: KID 2’s hand materializes a staff out of the dirt on the ground off the road…
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