Saturday, September 10, 2016

Concert Posters - Evelyn - P. A. Nolte


1/ On the doorstep of a small row house sleeps a young man in his early 20's.  His shaggy hair and denim jacket doing little to protect him from the cold.  A 1964 Valiant Barracuda is parked on the street.

2/ Closer, his unconscious form takes up most of a panel.

3/ As a shadow falls over him, he cautiously and groggily opens an eye.

4/ Silhouetted by the sun, a young girl still dressed for clubbing stands over him.

5/ He stands unsteadily.

6/ And meets her face to face.  She's a blank wall.  He's anything but.

7/ Having proved what he needed to prove, he passes right by her.

8/ She jumps slightly at the sound of his car door slamming but she won't turn around.

SFX: SLAM!

9/ The Barracuda pulls away from the house.  The girl has yet to move.  On the bumper is a sticker of a pirate ship/dirigible/phonograph.

3 comments:

  1. A bold choice to go without dialogue. You make a number of solid panel choices (the initial setup in 1, the majority of the confrontation, and the man's departure at the end), but there are a few I'm less certain of. How do you show the woman is in clubbing attire if she's silhouetted by the sun? For that matter, how do you represent that she's coming back from clubbing (it being early morning doesn't necessarily mean that)? And in panel 6, what is the opposite of being a blank wall? Is the man scream and rage at her? Stare her down icily? There are a number of options here and it's not exactly clear which one you want. If you don't have a preference, you should make that clear, but if you do, you should do the same.

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  2. Clubbing attire is nondescript in and of itself. A short skirt? A halter top? Her manner of dress, or where she's been, is less important than her sudden presence.

    The opposite of a blank wall is just that. Artist's choice. If he's angry. If he's screaming. If he's visibly distraught. Any emotion is better than no emotion. She's a blank wall. He's anything but.

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  3. Okay, I see where you're coming from there. Appreciate the clarification!

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