Sunday, September 11, 2016

Donald Trump – Trump Card, Pt. 3 – MK Stangeland, Jr.

(9 Panels)

Panel 1: An anti-Trumper (for simplicities sake, let’s call him STEVE) is angry about something.

STEVE (1): Donald Trump?

STEVE (2): Bah, his campaign is already as good as dead already.

Panel 2: STEVE is annoyed as he hears a report from a nearby TV.

TV: Donald Trump has moved to the front of the Republican Primary race!

Panel 3: STEVE is annoyed, more so than in PANEL 1.

STEVE (1): Whatever. It’s only temporary.

STEVE (2): He’ll be out in no time.

Panel 4: STEVE is further annoyed at the TV again.

TV: This just in - Donald Trump is now the official Republican Nominee for President!

Panel 5: STEVE is visibly upset.

STEVE (1): Trump will never be President.

STEVE (2): There is absolutely no way a guy like him could ever get elected!

Panel 6: STEVE fumes at the TV.

TV (1): Breaking news!

TV (2): Donald Trump has just been elected President of the United States!

Panel 7: STEVE has a malevolent and mischievous grin on his face.

STEVE: Donald Trump is sure to be immortal and never die!

Panel 8: STEVE looks to the TV, ready to celebrate.

TV (1): This just in!

TV (2): Donald Trump has just dropped dead…

Panel 9: Follow up cut from PANEL 8. STEVE is noticeably upset from being thwarted again.

TV: …weight off his body! Tune in next to see the amazing new physique he’s now sporting!


1 comment:

  1. A nice little call and response piece, with the TV's answers being well-timed and placed. That said, I think the script could potentially be a little tighter and more concise, and some of the dialogue may have benefited from another pass ("his campaign is already as good as dead already," for example).


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