For this one I decided to do the page that would precede my page from last week. This is a Batman Beyond story.
Exterior, night, futuristic Gotham city museum. The museum doors are hanging wide open and a red siren is blaring over the doorway.
1. SFX (siren): RRRRRRRRrrrrrriiiiinnnnnngggg!
Batman (Terry McGinnis), lands in front of the museum doors. The doors are hanging wide open and red siren is still going off over the doors.
2. SFX (siren): RRRRRRRRrrrrrriiiiinnnnnngggg!
Batman’s leg crosses a green beam as he steps into the museum.
3. SFX (digital): beep
Electric darts fly out from the sides of the doors toward Batman from hidden places.
Batman arches back in pain as electricity shocks him through his suit.
4. SFX: ssssshhhhzzzzzz!
5. BATMAN: AAAaaahhhh!
Batman lays on the ground unconscious. A tactical boot stands close to his head, but you can't see the rest of the owner of the boot.
6. BOOT-OWNER: That was shockingly easy.
- END -
I like the page. Lots of movement, with some nice close-ups in panels 3 and 4 of the smaller - yet no less important - moments. I do wonder if you could perhaps drop panel 1 and change the opening panel to be Batman racing inside instead of simply landing - might make the transition from the museum to clipping the green beam more evident.ReplyDelete
Otherwise, I can't decide if that pun is amazing or awful (so it's probably both).